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Literature
Untitled (Title Pending)
Things were always so complicated
I was never quite right
And I know I hate to say it, but
You've been on my mind
Through every road I chose
Through this distance, this divide
You were the one I always wanted
Wanted, all this time
That's why I'll do it
I'll move
To bring myself to you
If what they say is true
I'll be there soon
There were times I tried surrender
There were times I tried to fight
There were times I wanted someone right there by my side
There were times I wished for freedom
When I really wanted peace
I vied for silence but wouldn't give myself relief
So I'll do it
I'll move
To bring myself to you
If what they say is true
I'll be there soon
I can, I can take the pain
Even rejection at the gates
If it means at least I tried
At least I came your way
And though I'm quite aware
Of what some back then have said
If there was nothing all along, at least I'd know it then
I'll do it
I'll move
To bring myself to you
If what they say is true
I'll be there soon
(Instrumental break)
A
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Literature
Casual Conversation #2: Hot Weather and Cruel Kids
[J] Despite my best efforts, my home's become a heater
Nearly 103 over here, and I ain't talking bout a fever
[B] Florida's only 92, yet I have a secret to confide,
Regardless of the temperature, I'm always inside
[J] True dat, I stay inside, like a hermit
Sleeping with the jammy, I don't need nor got the permit
At the very least you got AC over there
To stay cool I must sequester myself downstairs
[J] Our rhymes are so fire though we wish they weren't
Cuz soon we might literally be burning
[B] Sick beats, strong lyrics and topics current
The fire may be too hot but we're known for never learning
[J] Though this is nothing like being stuck in PA during a heatwave
Because that happened to me, I believe in '08
[B] '08? That's hella long ago, you remember that far?
I was probably 6 and played with a toy car.
[J] Well back then I was 11
I was up on off the walls before I got my medicine
[B] Huh. When you mention meds, what kind?
Or was it the gummy ones my mom would find?
[J] Well when I s
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Literature
Casual Conversation (Rap Collaboration)
How are you doing this fine afternoon, my man? It's still morning where I am.
Well, playing some games, I woke up near eight.
Sleeping late was something I could always appreciate
I guess rest is something we all can, mate.
Yeah true. But school's coming and that can definitely wait
Much ado about nothing, that's on our plate.
I wonder how we met, the setting the place.
Especially how we started to communicate
Never went to invitations saying save the date
Standing by every faker all dressed in suede
It must have been fate then, we connected over the trait
Only to notice how dope each rap we made
Of course, we acknowledged how humble we are
And when we left we traded our calling cards
(Instrumental)
We came to be influential
And nonsensical
You better check our credentials if you think you're hiring someone better
Truly stated friend, for our skill in this field are quite proficient
Bars spit back and forth, our word play is simply magnificent
Now take it away, you charming linguist, I
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Literature
Tofane (Collab with R-R-Eco)
I don't know what I expected
I never planned this out, I had no intention
I'm not sure how it led to this
But sometime along we made a connection
Up and up and down the mountain
Some time spent then we come round again
Up and up and down the mountain
So then repeats the order of events
I don't want a concession
I would turn away if it's rejection
If I could prove my intentions
You'd know my love for you is uncontested
It grows to leaps and bounds like a mountain
No lounging around
No lingering doubts
Now the only thing I'm asking is for you to hear me out
Up and up and down the mountain
Some time spent then we come round again
Up and up and down the mountain
So then repeats the order of events
You had your doubts
I doubted myself as well
And even if this ends I'll make it better than another fond farewell
Up and up and down the mountain
Some time spent then we come round again
Up and up and down the mountain
So then repeats the order of events
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Literature
The End of an Era (Rap Section)
As you're spending time, know it's only yours, not mine
Cuz this ain't the environment of the Stepford Wives
Right – back in the day we each had a say and had a way
And as we'd like to think our five minutes of fame
How strange it is now to see it change like this
What once had flavor is now dated and tasteless
Barely better to be together than locked away at Strangeways
Buckingham said it best, let's go our own way
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Literature
Black Double Decker
Quick stop at the grocery shop
Grab a 6-pack 8 dollars a pop
The vineyard has plenty of wine
Likewise you find plenty
You seem to take any
Everything and anything
A new shame of any sin
And nothing best describes
What's left on your mind
I see you sitting right there and you're throwing your fits
Spewing "What did I do to de-serve this"
Well, have you got a couple cars, a weapon on you
Say that you'll go far, how that's going for you
Two beers on tap but no form of payment
You're outside face locked onto the pavement
The problem with your leisure
What's there to do to gain your pleasure
Not expecting any other
You're too dry to play it out
But too set to give it up
So there's no peace between desire and reality
The void fills an expanded sense of vanity
So all of your attempts have been in tame
No venture, no gain, and no anything
Panic
Things aren't going your way
Panic
Things will never be the same
And now we're back to where it was before
It's where it is again
And now you're just c
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Literature
The road ahead
Trapped in a car and I can't seem to turn around
Slowly yet surely losing all my ground
High-strung and my instincts void
Dead set while everyone's content and poised
That's what it's like
When travel has lost all its sense
No fuel in the tank, no signpost, no path
No defense, I can clearly see the end
Keeping my eyes on the straight and narrow
A thousand electric eyes I see
A single step out of the line
Will be the end of me
Ever since the fifth gear I knew there'd be a exit
Not a matter of when but rather where it is
Will I give in, because soon I know I'll slip
Like watching a junkie witnessing his last hit
I took a look and said to myself, "This is it"
Right on the trigger but could never begin ignition
It seemed like out of nowhere I was brought to a full stop
By some four car maneuver between gravel and a drop
They told me to wait
Be patient
There will be change
You'll be okay
And they were right
I've gotta get my passion back
Though I'm afraid that past has passed
And I hate, I'
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Literature
I Wanna Be Starting Something
I wanna be starting something
Not nothing
Do I remind you of something?
Probably not but I got
Whether you like it or not
Tac-tics to set myself from my peers
Could you sit down here
And would you be a dear
And take out the trash (Take out your trash)
I said that
All too rash
Have no fear cuz there's new allure here
I'm on the runnin like traffic
Polarizing like sunglasses
But could you do the same if you don't mind me asking
The word is N-E-V-E-R
Could you ever
Cuz I can do it better than any trendsetter
Never lesser than clever
A natural truth teller
I'm a high ball stepper
On par with Lloyd Webber
Guess who | ghost rap for Eminem
Even at two years old I get respect
And I cash the check
You ain't seen nothing yet
If you haven't yet
Play my tape and get respect
Try as you might hey baby make ad hoc with me
Here's how it stands: I'm the man who rocks the beat
I run up and off the wall
Every time with each line
Just to prove I am
Expanding horizons
Innovating my guise and
Whatever else
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Literature
Capitalize!
Get me a chance see | through your eyes | it gives me a chance to | capitalize
Wandering eyes they’re | mesmerized | that’s one more chance to | capitalize
My, oh my | I do indeed capitalize | and for that reason I’m staying
Staying atop this mountain of mine
(Ooh wooo) | It’s on your mind | (Ooh wooo) | It feels sublime | (Ooh wooo) | Comes in one great stack |
I have what you need I got what you lack
(Guitar solo)
I walk the line these | other guys | they lack the drive they | fall behind |
And if you think they're | saving life | that’s one more chance to | capitalize
My oh my
They needed sight, needed time
Now I got them all in formation
Forming through this one of a kind
(Ooh wooo) | It’s on your mind | (Ooh wooo) | It feels sublime | (Ooh wooo) | I’m talking this and that |
I have what you need I got what you lack
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Literature
Moldy Bread
All my life I had moldy bread
But I didn't live with those heads of lead
Oh, wait a minute, wait a second I lied
I never really had anyone on my behind
I gotta
Get back and sit back and lay back
Hear the facts while you have your heart attack
Michael, Michael, be my disciple
We can break the cycle
Oh no you ain't the Michael
So, Psycho Atikon Sane
Saying it's too late to barter the phrase
Get with it
To sin it, to spin it
You should know by now whose record is kickin
Ska dala be bop, a shoo be lee do
And you can write the facts, Imma do what I wanna do
But I'm running out of things to say
So I better get to it or have nothing to say
(Okay)
I got one name on the back of my fist
And two timing when I amount to this
So much for three cuz that's enough for me
And if you want more you'll have to settle with 4
Lumberjack
Pull out your sack and sit back
Betcha didn’t expect me to complement, twat
Betcha didn't expect that plan of attack
Betcha couldn’t guess I’d be where it&
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Literature
Shakedown
Pages and pages of hollywood transcripts
Could not amount to this
I've got a story to spit
It started off any other way
Some came in, shook up
To my dismay
Some played through their makeup
But I was surprised just how quick fans idolized
Each act
They came out with a passion
But these moments were just pennies to the dire
The crowd desired
The final headliner
In no time
I grabbed the mic
Put down a slick rhyme
We were both surprised
So they asked if I could replicate
And come again
Affirmative
Salutations til we meet again
So I wrote to it
Got to it again
Got rid of this nuisance that I was once cueing
To be doing
A new wave and phase
A new game to practice in the shade
And soon enough I started making sense
And cents became fen the fen became dense
So I moved right outta China
Past North Carolina
And back to L.A. where the smoke stacks lay
Weeks pass and stumble pon the daze
You know the story,
The name, the game, the face
One day I finished my surgery
Turn to my right in my sights se
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Literature
Elizabethan Queen
When I spar
Jaws agape it seems
As if you can't compete you lack that expertise
So kindly, if you'd be too keen
Bow down to me
Indeed
Elizabethan Queen
Doth protesteth too much methinks
Perhaps you need a shrink when you're on the brink
I decree
Your wit
Is not meant for business
You can't relate
What is this
Inches?
Short tykes trying to murder my meter
Forget that they are the students and I am the teacher
Still
They give orders to peck me like bird feeder
They don't know the natural order around here
You see, I'm a queen, the opposite of Nikki
It ain't a diss
Check the context
I'm honest
These verses I be dropping are impeccibly polished
I'm talkin
Vases
Goblets
Under god but donning frocks in gardens beside these imposters
But, shun the bards it's this flow I'm fraught with
That I embarked in
But I ain't disheartened
Cuz I retool as quick as an artisan
As long as I'm alive
Hip hop lives
Eloquence | I hit with quickly
And enemies | I see most easily
So if you like your life expectan
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Things were always so complicated
I was never quite right
And I know I hate to say it, but
You've been on my mind

Through every road I chose
Through this distance, this divide
You were the one I always wanted
Wanted, all this time

That's why I'll do it
I'll move
To bring myself to you
If what they say is true
I'll be there soon

There were times I tried surrender
There were times I tried to fight
There were times I wanted someone right there by my side

There were times I wished for freedom
When I really wanted peace
I vied for silence but wouldn't give myself relief

So I'll do it
I'll move
To bring myself to you
If what they say is true
I'll be there soon

I can, I can take the pain
Even rejection at the gates
If it means at least I tried
At least I came your way

And though I'm quite aware
Of what some back then have said
If there was nothing all along, at least I'd know it then

I'll do it
I'll move
To bring myself to you
If what they say is true
I'll be there soon

(Instrumental break)

As I look up at the TV
See credits on the screen
A lonely man has found someone
His soul is finally free
Untitled (Title Pending)
This is the conclusion to an album concept I'm working on. Let me know what you think it's about, and if you have any idea for a title. The title does not necessarily need to be in the lyrics, by the way.
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How are you doing this fine afternoon, my man? It's still morning where I am.

Well, playing some games, I woke up near eight.
Sleeping late was something I could always appreciate

I guess rest is something we all can, mate.

Yeah true. But school's coming and that can definitely wait

Much ado about nothing, that's on our plate.

I wonder how we met, the setting the place.
Especially how we started to communicate

Never went to invitations saying save the date
Standing by every faker all dressed in suede
It must have been fate then, we connected over the trait
Only to notice how dope each rap we made

Of course, we acknowledged how humble we are
And when we left we traded our calling cards

(Instrumental)

We came to be influential
And nonsensical
You better check our credentials if you think you're hiring someone better

Truly stated friend, for our skill in this field are quite proficient
Bars spit back and forth, our word play is simply magnificent
Now take it away, you charming linguist, I'm sure it'll be worth the listen.

I made myself known after breaking outta Strangeways
But my real claim of fame is what I'm giving here today
Though no one asked, we apologize for the wait
To finally hear something that could actually satisfy good taste
Casual Conversation (Rap Collaboration)
I made this piece today just a little earlier with :iconbashfulthebot:! Let us know what you think of it!
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I don't know what I expected
I never planned this out, I had no intention
I'm not sure how it led to this
But sometime along we made a connection

Up and up and down the mountain
Some time spent then we come round again
Up and up and down the mountain
So then repeats the order of events

I don't want a concession
I would turn away if it's rejection
If I could prove my intentions
You'd know my love for you is uncontested

It grows to leaps and bounds like a mountain
No lounging around
No lingering doubts
Now the only thing I'm asking is for you to hear me out

Up and up and down the mountain
Some time spent then we come round again
Up and up and down the mountain
So then repeats the order of events

You had your doubts
I doubted myself as well
And even if this ends I'll make it better than another fond farewell

Up and up and down the mountain
Some time spent then we come round again
Up and up and down the mountain
So then repeats the order of events
Tofane (Collab with R-R-Eco)
Collaboration with R-R-Eco. He provided the image while I did the lyrics. His part is here: r-r-eco.deviantart.com/art/Tof…

I didn't mean for this to turn out to be about love, but that's how it came out. I started from the chorus and worked from there. Let me know what you think!
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As you're spending time, know it's only yours, not mine
Cuz this ain't the environment of the Stepford Wives
Right – back in the day we each had a say and had a way
And as we'd like to think our five minutes of fame
How strange it is now to see it change like this
What once had flavor is now dated and tasteless
Barely better to be together than locked away at Strangeways
Buckingham said it best, let's go our own way
The End of an Era (Rap Section)
This is a portion of a song I worked on in a songwriting program I was just in. Let me know what you think!

By the way, the final line references the song "Go Your Own Way" by Fleetwood Mac, which was written by Lindsey Buckingham.


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NaoFaria Featured By Owner 2 days ago  Hobbyist
also thanks for the watch
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FindingItHarder Featured By Owner 2 days ago
You're welcome! Keep doing what you like doing, whether that be art or otherwise!
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Ocxin Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2017
Line-delivery!

"And this will forever be a world
 ruled by ex-tro-verts"
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FindingItHarder Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2017
"The sort of people who'd give you the middle finger since birth"
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Ocxin Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2017
Uh-huh, sounds like something.
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FindingItHarder Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2017
:D
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FindingItHarder Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2017
Sorry I haven't replied to this in a while. I've just been busy. I'll try to get to this tomorrow.
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Ocxin Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2017
It's ok. Take your time.
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Adanel Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2017
Thank you a lot for the watch and favs!!^^
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FindingItHarder Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2017
You're welcome! You come up with some pretty amusing jokes! I haven't finished "My Trainer Is an Idiot" yet, but I plan on it!
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